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Thursday, 10 August 2017

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Sweet Dog
Once upon a time in a far away Castle,,,lives a very cruel King,,,He left happiness behind. All the slaves suffered from his ruling. The King has a child named Sweetie,,,even Sweetie also suffered the cruelty from his father. Almost all the people from his Kingdom were already mad at the King. But, Sweetie really loves his father to get harmed by the people whose getting angry.

One day the King was feeling weak,,,he is getting older,,, and the whole kingdom want the King to be killed. Sweetie find a way to protect themselves from the people who want to kill them..then, she ask a favor from a fairy Godmother that if he can magic the king into a dog and Sweetie into a cupcake.

When the very angry people’s arrived at the Castle,,,they were surprise,,,no King and Sweetie in there instead they found a dog that is guarding a cupcake on the table.

Then the dog and the cupcake was in the table was set down.And the cupcake was not move and she can’t talk.Then the dog was can move and can shout.Then the dog was can get a food

Then the people was have a new  king  in the castle and he is a good king and the people in the castle was happy because they have a new king and very good king.And he not like in the another king.

Then the cupcake she can’t move like a ice and she can’t eat.Then the dog was find a food because the dog was hungry. And he find a food the food is a ham is yummy.And That dog and a cupcake is the King and Sweetie… END

    

2 comments:

  1. Hey JV! I like your writing but I'm not sure about your punctuation marks, maybe next time you should check your puncation marks but you did a very good job on your writing. Keep up the good work! =D

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  2. Hi JV your writing is so interesting. Your writing makes me read it twice again.

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